New Story for University Project

So after realizing my mistakes on the previous story, I have sort of came up with a new one. The ideas and settings are basically still the same, but I made changes to Zion's character.

Zion will no longer be an accomplice of the organization. He will be another captive. Zion is the son of another powerful man, like Farahilde, is being kept there for his own protection under an alias. When Farahilde passes his cell, he calls out to her for help. And she helps him out of his cell. In contrast to Farahilde's strong, independent personality, Zion is timid and fearful. During their escape, they come to a large tunnel which is too high for neither of them to reach. Being the compassionate and selfless person, Farahilde boosts Zion up first. But as she reaches up for him to pull her up, guards show up in pursuit. Zion trembles and abandons Farahilde in fear. Angered by his cowardice, Farahilde is able to defeat the guards and use their bodies as a foothold and climb to the tunnel. She also takes one of the guards gun. As she approaches the exit, she sees Zion hopelessly banging on the exit door. He finally slides to the ground in despair. He hears Farahilde's gun click, as he looks up she shoots in his direction. But she does not shoot him, instead she shoots the door lock and thus the door can be opened. Farahilde walks to him, grabs his collar and glares at him. He looks back at her terrified. Farahilde's expression then softens and she lets him go. She opens the door and exits with Zion scurrying behind her.

Themes: A girl can be her own hero
             When you give you don't always receive something in return
             It's an every man for himself world. Or, in this case, every girl for herself.

So... I think this story makes a bit more sense. The turning point would be when Zion leaves Farahilde. But I don't think the protagonist changes in anyway throughout the story. This will need to brought to the lecturer discussed in depth. Personally, I quite like it. The protagonist is shown to be compassionate, brave and also forgiving. Maybe I should have her punch Zion in the face as pay back?

Anyway, concepts for Zion and Farahilde's designs. Sorry for the bad quality, I used my phone camera.

 Zion:

Farahilde: